Thursday, 14 June 2012

First Fight/First Kiss Part 2


Time for Round 2 of the First Fight, First Kiss blogfest hosted by Danielle and Jackie! Today, I will be showing you the first kiss scene from my CampNaNo novel! To read the first fight scene - click here. The first post was written from Jesse's POV, but for this one, we we're in Isabelle's. :D Also, don't forget this is still a first draft, so it's a little rough around the edges. ;)

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My heart started to beat faster as he put his hand up to my cheek. It made me feel so safe when he did that. Like he was telling me that there was nowhere else he wanted to be, and that nothing could ever hurt me while he was around. Very slowly, he began to lean in towards me. I so badly wanted him to kiss me, I could practically taste him, but panic surged through me and I pulled away.
He froze, his hand still in the air where, just a second before, it had been stroking my cheek. It would have been funny if I hadn’t been so embarrassed for freaking out.
“I’m sorry,” he said, stepping back. “Too fast.”
I shook my head. “No. It’s not … it wasn’t. I just … Jesse, when I said guys don’t normally notice me, I wasn’t lying.”
I didn’t want to have to say it out loud. My name’s Isabelle, I’m seventeen years old and nobody has ever kissed me before. Ever. If that didn’t make him see how lame I was, nothing would. Jesse’s eyes widened as understanding seeped into his brain.
“Wow,” he said, staring at me as if I’d just told him I was from Mars. I thought he’d be surprised, not horrified. So much for him making me feel safe. I glared at him because there weren’t enough words to explain how much of an idiot his look had made me feel. I turned to walk away, but he sped around in front of me, blocking my way.
“Wait.”
“Why? So you can keep staring at me like I’m some kind of alien species?”
Jesse took my hands in his. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to look at you that way, but … Isabelle, you’re so freakin’ cute, I don’t understand how nobody has ever kissed you before.”
I didn’t know whether to be annoyed with him for saying it and making my embarrassment worse, or throw myself into his arms for being so sweet. So I didn’t move. I just let him hold my hands for a bit longer.
“We can just slow down if you want,” he said. “There’s no pressure.”
It’s just a kiss, it’s not a big deal!
But it was a big deal. I’d waited this long for my first kiss, and the longer I waited, the more of a big deal it had become. Why hadn’t I just got it over with during a game of Spin The Bottle when I was thirteen like everyone else? Now it held so much significance, it had to be perfect. I’d never felt half as much for anyone as I was beginning to feel for Jesse, and in a way, that made it scarier. What if I disappointed him?
“Let’s just go home,” Jesse said, squeezing my hands. “We’ll eat, and hang out with your family and we can go out again another time.”
“No,” I said, even though I hadn’t quite thought it through properly. He didn’t move, I think he was afraid he might scare me away again. It was a valid concern. As sure as I was that I wanted to kiss him – God, I wanted to kiss him – I didn’t know if I could trust myself not to flip out again.
“You’re making me nervous,” he said.
“Me?” I laughed. “How?”
“I just … this is a big thing. You just have a million expectations of how this should be, and I don’t want to ruin them.”
Silly me. I hadn’t even considered that Jesse was under pressure too. Or at least that he might feel as though it was pressure. If he was a rubbish kisser, how would I know? It’s not like I had anything to compare it to.
“Could we try again now, please?” I asked. “I’m ready.”
His fear had helped calm my own, and this time it was me who reached for him. His waist was firm. Lean, but muscly and I couldn’t help but wonder how he’d look with his shirt off. I imagined a perfect six pack underneath his blue t-shirt, and I allowed myself an internal swoon at the idea of it.
Calm down! You haven’t even kissed yet, and you’re already undressing him in your mind!
I was pleased Jesse couldn’t read my thoughts as he slipped his arms around me again.
“Are you sure?” he asked, looking down at me with concern in his green eyes.
I nodded, even though my heart was banging so hard, I thought it might leap right out of my chest.
Jesse smiled, and this time when he leaned in, I didn’t run away. My eyes closed, and as his lips lightly touched mine, everything else around me faded away. I couldn’t hear the cars, or feel the cold. I could only feel him, warming me with his kiss. 

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Huge thanks to Danielle and Jackie for hosting this hop, it's been brilliant! :D If I don't get to your posts today, I promise to do so tomorrow - I am just a little swamped with final (and when I say final, I really mean it this time lol) edits for Game On!

P.S BIG NEWS ALERT! My cover for Game On is ready and I will be revealing it tomorrow!! 

33 comments:

  1. You captured the nervousness of the first kiss perfectly! This transported me back in time to mine. Well done!

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  2. I'm with LG - well done. Great emotions here. Can't wait to see your cover!

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  3. So where's Jesse now? lol I honestly would have to dig into the far reaches of my brain to remember mine but I already know I couldn't tell it as well as what you just did.

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  4. I agree with Talli and L.G. The emotion is great. I love the part about the internal swoon.

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  5. Heh, you took the first kiss aspect of this quite literally, didn't you? I loved it. I've been Isabelle, and I could totally relate to everything she was feeling. And you did a good job making Jesse very sweet without pushing him over into unbelievable or a cliche.

    I love that she hadn't even kissed him, and she was already undressing him in her mind.

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  6. Aww, how sweet. Not only Jesse and Isabelle's first together but Isabelle's first kiss ever.

    Looking forward to seeing your cover :-)

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  7. That was such a beautiful piece, and who can't relate to that fear over their first kiss?

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  8. This is great! You've done a wonderful job of capturing all the nervousness usually involved in a first kiss. Loved it!

    Looking forward to seeing your cover. :)

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  9. Kyra- this is so sweet, and felt so genuine. I really liked it. Can't wait to see the cover for GAME ON.

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  10. Such a tender piece for a budding romance. Love it. :)

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  11. This is the total opposite of how I was growing up. I mean... not that I was a loosy goosy but I had my first kiss in the 3rd grade. I loved the rawness of the whole thing. His sweetness and her lust. So great!

    Bring on the cover. Can't wait!

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  12. So sweet, I could just picture it! Look forward to seeing the cover for GAME ON.

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  13. Ahh. I really liked this. It was just so sweet.

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  14. Aww! So sweet! Can't wait to see the cover for GAME ON!

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  15. Great scene, I love how you portrayed Isabelle's nervousness! Also, I'm very excited to see your cover for Game On! :)

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  16. OMG I love it!!! I can totally sense the tension between them and love how she's tentative :P

    Great job and nice to meet you!!

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  17. I just adored this. With Jesse and Isabelle you've captured something really sweet, genuine, and innocent. First love is a very powerful thing, and you've conveyed the emotions - fear, panic, pressure, excitement, uncertainty - of them here perfectly.

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  18. Beautiful summing up of her big moment! Emotive stuff - had me asking myself to recall my own feelings from back then!! Really delicate - well done!!

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  19. Did you read my journal from high school?! LOL
    You tapped in perfectly with the emotions and thoughts involving her first kiss. Loved this.

    Thanks for participating in our blogfest!

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  20. I loved Danielle's perspective. I felt all of the nerves and excitement and pressure of a first kiss reading this scene, and I loved the ending :)

    Andrea

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  21. Wooot! Loved this excerpt Kyra! Such a sweet first kiss, and I really think your rough drafts are as good (better) than some people's supposed polished versions. :D

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  22. SUPER FUN!!!

    And hooray for covers :-D

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  23. Aww, that was a really sweet kiss! And awesome cover!! Yay for Game On!!!

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  24. That was soooooo cute! I loved it. I can't wait to read more of this :)

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  25. Very sweet. I love how both of them admit their vulnerability.

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  26. Such a sweet moment! To be young and innocent again. I loved it. :)

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  27. Thank you so much for all your comments! I'm so sorry I haven't had time to reply individually, I will be a better blogger next week!!

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  28. Beautiful! You totally deserved first place! And I love your cover - your friend is so talented! Best of luck with it :)

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